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Just a few things. This will be seen in many places that the media advisory
will not so I think it's important to keep the third paragraph which lists
some of the reasons that we have come together.

I do have to disagree on replacing system with world. The world will go on
with or without us and has amazing regenerative power it will never be
broken. The system we have imposed on it is what's destroying it and it's
the system that is broken,

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We are the 99%*

This Saturday people in Edmonton will join a global movement striving for a
better world and we want you to join.

What began with a few citizens setting up tents in Wall Street's Financial
District in New York City has grown into a movement of thousands.
Demonstrations have already begun in the rest of the United States, in
Canada and around the World...

*On Saturday, October 15th, the Global Call to Action will be answered.***

Corporate greed is killing us. Corporations are infecting our political
institutions and dictating public policy, and the system we live in
continues to put a hunger for profits above the health and well being of our
communities and the environment.

We are many and we have many concerns. The world is broken, so we are
joining in solidarity with communities and movements around the world to
demand, create and be the change.

We want a system that works for us, not against us and on October 15th we
will take one step closer to that goal.

JOIN US!!!

*Saturday, October 15th*
12:00 p.m.
Sir Winston Churchill Square
Edmonton, Alberta

Rally and march followed by a General Assembly meeting to discuss a
longer-term encampment. Please bring signs and your dreams and desires for a
better, more just world.

For more information contact:
*oc.yeg.i...@gmail.com* or visit the website: *http://occupyedmonton.org/*

For more information on the global ‘occupy wall street’ movement:

http://www.occupytogether.org/

https://occupywallst.org/

I would agree with scratching "The world is broken" and using "The system is broken", it's the system we're trying to change. Also, in the following paragraph, it states "We want a system that works for us".

Just some thoughts, for what it's worth.

Those changes sound good to me too, esp. the part about "We want a system that works for us". Well done.